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If, I Tell You I Love You

What will you do?

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If, you don't want me
What can I do?
If, you don't feel the same way
I guess that means we're really through

If, you smile at me
I'll have to turn away
If, you try to be my friend
I'll have to build more walls in my day

If, I plead for your affections
And your answer is always the same
If, I tell you I love you
Maybe I can win you back by making a change

If, I never met you
Would I be better off now?
If, our paths never crossed
Maybe this pain would stop somehow

If, we could turn back time
And you could remember the perfection of our kiss
If, we started over
We could begin again with a new magical bliss

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If, only I could tell you

If, you only knew
My heart is breaking
Dear love,

Without you

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#1 by goodselfme, Dec 7, 2008
Oh this pain that I know so well. I feel so deeply sorry that you know this pain enough to express it so poignantly here. I wish you peace and that you know you made the right decision.
#2 by  Inna Tysoe, Dec 7, 2008
You expressed that very well.

Inna
#3 by  Ben Johnson, Dec 7, 2008
The confusion of love and its demise well told here. Great picture to go with it as well.
#4 by roberto sardelli, Dec 7, 2008
Well expressed, I know that feeling all well myself Liane. Very well written as usual my dear friend.

God Bless and take care
#5 by  Westbrook, Dec 7, 2008
Most of us have experienced this pain. You have puts words to it. The biggest problem in this situation is not knnowing the truth.
#6 by Unofre Pili, Dec 7, 2008
Nice work as usual. Tragic yet romantic.
#7 by  tilted, Dec 7, 2008
OMG I'm in love this is beautiful my # is --- --- ----
#8 by  BC Doan, Dec 7, 2008
Very nice, romantic, and I can go on adding more "if" since the flow is so inspiring..
#9 by  Frederick Zammit, Dec 7, 2008
It touched my heart and reminded me about a story of 10 years ago. Good work
#10 by  MJPatrick, Dec 7, 2008
Wow! very romantic.
#11 by  Kim Buck, Dec 7, 2008
Very romantic and very heartbreaking.
#12 by  S M Blomker, Dec 7, 2008
I like the poem very much. Pain and heartache usely run together when your heart has broken. I've lost a love once that I wish I could have gotten back...thank you for your writing....s.m.blomker
#13 by  Will Gray, Dec 7, 2008
Such a wonderful piece! I can sincereley relate to this!
#14 by  Jasin, Dec 7, 2008
Sad poem, love lost is hard but love not understood is worse.
#15 by bread, Dec 7, 2008
I loved it.
#16 by  NA Staffieri, Dec 7, 2008
I want to put music to this one. Soft Rock or Easy Listening perhaps.
Good job, Liane.
#17 by  Matt H, Dec 7, 2008
I really like this :) Great expression
#18 by  Joshua Miguel, Dec 7, 2008
your work is full of emotions. great work!
#19 by gigisimbre, Dec 7, 2008
wow...
very well written, and i could just feel it.
#20 by  KathySpring, Dec 7, 2008
This was really moving. Thank you for sharing
#21 by  Judy Sheldon, Dec 7, 2008
Liane, you are beautiful as you are and should not change for anyone but yourself. When we try to meet others expectations we lose ourselves. It is better to lose someone else than to lose you.

I love your poem.

Take car & God bless.
#22 by  James DeVere, Dec 7, 2008
Nice rhyme. I really liked the comma after the if. Punctuation is a great way to build rhythms and give the reader space to breath.

Well done . j
#23 by luctus Corvus, Dec 7, 2008
love is this
love is bliss
put in beat
like that of heart
made to pain and tear you apart
luctus corvus
#24 by  Launie and Melynda Sorrels, Dec 7, 2008
This is something that is easy to relate to. Good job of expressing it.
#25 by Poetic Enigma, Dec 7, 2008
This is a great poem,
very beautifully written,
Definately heart touching
#26 by  Adam Henry Sears, Dec 7, 2008
Hi, Liane, how are you?
Wow, I like this poem a lot, it has some truly heart-breaking lines, good job!
#27 by Michelle~Parker, Dec 7, 2008
Wow, Your in a league of your own. You have definately have a talent for poetry as this poem brought tears to my eyes. Anything be it a book or a movie if it makes you laugh or cry then it is mere perfection. You have successfully moved us all.
With love and blessings,
Love Shelley.
xoxoxoxoxoxoxo
#28 by rileyd, Dec 8, 2008
It's a graet poem,very touching,I loved it.
#29 by  MMV Abad, Dec 8, 2008
Lonesome... romantic poem...
#30 by  The Gray Edge, Dec 8, 2008
I can relate to those feelings well and how it wreaks havoc on
the heart. It is powerfully written and elevates from line
to line.
#31 by  Dendro Azures, Dec 8, 2008
Wonderful poem. Filled with emotion. Loved it.
#32 by The Quail, Dec 8, 2008
Very beautiful.
#33 by  Bren Parks, Dec 8, 2008
Quite Lovely.
#34 by  Gerlaine, Dec 8, 2008
I have felt this way, as well as leaving other in smoldering in this path. Very much felt.
#35 by  dayes, Dec 8, 2008
it struck a chord.
#36 by  bhahmz, Dec 8, 2008
OMG! I just love your poems!! =>
THat was the best love poem I think I have EVER read!
Keep it up =)
#37 by  Paula Mitchell Bentley, Dec 8, 2008
Tragically beautiful. Great work as always Liane!!!
#38 by  Liffy, Dec 8, 2008
this can relate to just about everyone i know me deffinatly. well expressed. great pictures!
#39 by Eunice Tan, Dec 8, 2008
Simple, beautiful but painful too. Good job, Liane
#40 by  Burning Ice, Dec 9, 2008
I thought you're talking to me! :)) Nice work, I felt shivers down my spine...
#41 by andrea, Dec 9, 2008
nice work , it was good
#42 by shafi choudhury, Dec 9, 2008
What i lovely poem! I should say you are a very talanted writer! No wonder you get soo many views. May everything workout right for both of you!
Please keep writing
#43 by  sarahe1981, Dec 9, 2008
way to go, beautiful write!
#44 by Katie Emily, Dec 9, 2008
Loved the poem. It was very well written and very colorful. Great job.
#45 by xxEverWanderingxxo, Dec 9, 2008
The pain in this really comes across, great job *hugs*
#46 by BoJack454@Triond, Dec 9, 2008
Like many others have said here,I know this one too.You said it all so well,and were strong enough to share this with others.This is a pain that only you can know the measure of.
#47 by  akilah, Dec 9, 2008
Wow! Me know all so well.... it sucks.... but the poem was written so nicely. I enjoyed it.
#48 by  Jeoffrey Meister, Dec 9, 2008
Beautiful poem, Liane. I've been there so I know how you feel.
#49 by -agape-, Dec 9, 2008
Very nice... I so can relate to this poem *sigh*.
#50 by  Vanja Kovacic, Dec 10, 2008
This poem is absolutely terrific! I especially liked the way you were able to convey so much emotion practically solely through questions. I also like the language very much, so simple and direct and perfect for getting the point across.

I am relatively new here and am just browsing through the poems and yours really touched me. A great poem!
#51 by  jfkberdan, Dec 10, 2008
right! It's a great poem.
#52 by Deana Lynn, Dec 10, 2008
Completely moved!!
#53 by  Lily River, Dec 10, 2008
I have a similar situation and I was absolutely moved!
#54 by  A M McDonald, Dec 10, 2008
very touching! Seems like someone out there is breaking your heart. Im very sorry if thats the case!!!
#55 by TommyP, Dec 10, 2008
What guy in his right mind would not want you?!? Look at all the love directed at you in these comments (not to mention all the other poems/articles) Whoever this guy is HE\'S the one missing out!
Or maybe he\'s intimidated by your level of intelligence, beauty commitment, or any number of other insecurities we all have.
I\'ve never even met you and I love you!!! ;-)~
#56 by  Timothy Drayton Russell, Dec 10, 2008
Wow Liane,73 "I like its" 74 w/ mine. You have such charisma in your writing it almost doesn't matter what you write about, it's always you in the words you use and the feeling you portray. It's like anyone that reads what you have, has an immediate assosiative understanding and compasion for you, the person, even more than that which you write about because, honestly, that's was the 1st thing I perceived when I first read one of your many, many writings and, I am sure, this is only the tip of all that is YOU, an honest, sincere, passive yet convincingly strong heart and mind put forth as the soul of love. I'm w/ homeboy TommyP in that how could anyone not love you except someone out of his tree (a fallen nut?) and, yes I do personally have much love for you and all you are. God keep on blessing you for you have much work to do pushing all that love, out into a world that is bereft of love and compassion, through your writings; empathy over apathy will conquer all!

Sincere Love,

Tim
#57 by  nobert soloria bermosa, Dec 10, 2008
another lovely piece of poetry,you are well-loved,keep it up
#58 by  AC Hamilton III, Dec 10, 2008
Awesome! Truly deep and real world stuff. I felt it. Keep up the good work.
#59 by  Ruby Hawk, Dec 10, 2008
Its a sweet lovely thing to be in love. take care, Ruby
#60 by  HatedNation, Dec 11, 2008
I like the street Grafiti..
#61 by anonomous, Dec 11, 2008
i so wish i could turn back time as i fear my relationship is going to end up there, hes becoming all sexual and less loving oh im startring to think i liked it better when he lied to me
i love him i worship him and im only waiting for him to show me the same, hes strying and he nvr notices when he slips back into his old self but i fear tat he'll forget wat true love is again when hes just found it
#62 by r. porter, Dec 11, 2008
Very nice! I like your clean use of rhyme. It usually is not that big a deal to rhyme, but you have a good style.
#63 by  ellen_ruppart, Dec 11, 2008
What a beautiful poem, Liane! Keep up the great work.

~Ellen
#64 by  Anthony M Jones, Dec 11, 2008
"Awesome! Truly deep and real world stuff. I felt it. Keep up the good work."

I agree completely
#65 by  Cynthia Bartlett, Dec 11, 2008
I really enjoyed reading your poem.
#66 by  Lostash, Dec 11, 2008
Another fine piece, with great pictures too.
#67 by  JOSELITO B BISENIO, Dec 11, 2008
as always, this is another blockbuster hit!!!
#68 by  Zechariah Long, Dec 12, 2008
Lovely poem Liane. It sounds very similar to something I went through last month and I understand how painful and confusing it is.
#69 by  R.B. Parsley, Dec 12, 2008
Liane,
This is absolutely beautiful, and heart breaking. It made me want to cry. Excellent job!!! Keep up the great work.

Randy
#70 by girish, Dec 12, 2008
read my love poems you will find the way to earn your beloved`s love
#71 by Christina Gubbels, Dec 12, 2008
Great! The story of my marriage! Inspiring, and thoughts for me to ponder on.
#72 by Buck Finkle, Dec 12, 2008
Really good job!
#73 by Mr Smiles, Dec 12, 2008
very nice, I really liked it
#74 by april, Dec 13, 2008
i the poem is great. thats exactly how i feel about this one guy.
#75 by  Milton H Peebles III, Dec 15, 2008
I feel that
#76 by Christiine Ramsay, Dec 17, 2008
I really feel for you through this poem. So sad yet so beautiful.

Christine
#77 by  Izzy Daniels, Dec 21, 2008
I thought it was a beautiful use of poetry. nice work
#78 by  Angie0000023, Jan 7, 2009
This was very good and I very much enjoyed reading it. You r a good writer. I liked it. Good picture choices also btw.

And thank youf for commenting some of my stuff. It means alot to me.
#79 by  Lizzie Green, Jan 8, 2009
Just beautiful x
#80 by trishia, Jan 8, 2009
Poetry at it's best! This truly is a pouring out of heart write.
#81 by  Eva Ohil, Jan 11, 2009
This is wonderful, and beautiful, and hear-wrenching all at once. I can feel the emotion of this piece beating in my own heart!

Absolutely perfect.

Yours truly,

Eva Ohil
#82 by  Reilley, Jan 15, 2009
Point well taken, and I am glad you included this link in another article, or I would have missed this poem.
#83 by Shannon, Feb 23, 2009
That was beautiful poem. Very ell written and I love the picture of the half of heart.a-girl-on-a-mission
#84 by sunshines, Feb 24, 2009
This is the exact pain i feel, i wish i would know if he loves me too...want him to be my other half, make the pain go away, as he is the one....for me
#85 by sunshines, Feb 24, 2009
wish he lets me know, the pain is so much, and can not let go, only if i would know if he feels the same as what i feel too...
#86 by lh, Apr 9, 2009
XTREMELY,

WONDERFUL MY REGARDS TOO
LH
#87 by sandie, May 7, 2009
I liked this, not sure about the last bit after the picture, i don.t think you need this.
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