Misunderstood

Powerfully written. A well done piece.

Good job. Keep on writing.

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Everything you write, I find myself reading in "rap" form...is that right? It feels right.

expressive lines,keep writing,thanks

Do you make any music? I like writers like you because it's all

True Soul with Days of Growin Old.

Keep Writin' Noel. Peace

This poem is good. Have you tried explaining your feelings, instead of getting mad? It makes better writing --no matter if you use bad words. Grammar is also important, although not all important; fooling the "grammar" people is also the great writer's business. You know what I mean. Best Regards.

Great job ! Keep on writing !

Thanks for the invite your right you are a good writer look for ward to reading some more.

good job, keep up the good work.

okay heres a thought get some country in you and get away cause by the sound of that life your gonna die young and well I do not like it. your writings cool but you need a new seenery, check my writing out who is in control and feel free to email me and Ill always reply kewel



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I like the dramatic qualities in this poem and the theatrical aspects. But try combining the dialogue with imagery. Good job so far. But you could bring out the dramatic effect even more so if you added imagery & personafication (like giving inanimate objects. or describing your feelings using energy. Like using words for fire for example to describe the soul or like steel to describe the mind for example. Some form of exaggerated statements. But I do like what you\'ve written so far. Just try incorporting such elements in addition to what you already have.
Otherwise, the poem has very power display of emotion, which really makes it very beautiful.

Take Care,

Kiki Stamatiou (Joanna Maharis)

Also be sure to check out some of my work as well. I\'d appreciate your input. Thanks so much.

Hello, this is a great piece. You had left me a message and it doesn't seem to want to go through. Could you send me your e-mail address and I can send you my reply to your request?
Keep on writing.
Julia

Wow! I can feel the anger and fustration in this piece! Great work. Awesome.

This is good.Did you know writing can bea form of therapy?

Hell Yeah... I really like that... It sounds kinda like some of the stuff that I write... And you write from your heart to, you can tell you put alot of feeling in your poems... Keep up the good work